Saturday, September 23, 2006

school parking lot
summer grass
flows into the drain

6 Comments:

Blogger Natalia L. Rudychev said...

I like the feeling created by this one.

3:53 AM  
Blogger texas haijin said...

i edited this haiku.

9:45 AM  
Blogger polona said...

well done!

11:13 AM  
Blogger Masago said...

Dustin, what do you mean you edited this haiku?

7:08 PM  
Blogger texas haijin said...

it was "autumn deepens" at the end of the haiku (line three) as the kigo. i felt that the haiku told too much.

9:37 PM  
Blogger Aurora said...

I like the edited version very much.

7:24 AM  

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